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Sometimes in midnights, lifeless,
when all is still and meek.
I would sit amongst the corners,
of that residential spot,
you so have claimed against my heart.

That bitter sweat of sarcasm,
sharpened to my senses.
Poisonous substances,
a shroud arrest upon thy shoulders.

Potassium Cyanide,
leaking from your eyes.
Begging me oh so sweetly,
to stay here by your side.

To roll in Smokey haze,
beyond the dawn of sunlight.
To slumber ever on,
in reality amiss,
to linger on your sugared lips,
licks of hidden poison.

   Yet i shan't leave this life in jest,
   to stay with one who spites me so.
   I’ll run to she who loves me best,
   for she shall rescue me from woe.

   Until such time as woe prevails,
   I’ll only dream of you, my queen.
   And when it comes, my love, she wails,
   in you, sweet death, I shall be seen.

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~8flames8claws Jan 17, 2013  Student General Artist
"That bitter sweat of sarcasm,
sharpened to my senses.
Poisonous substances,
a shroud arrest upon thy shoulders."

Beautiful poem! I love this verse. I don't know much about poetry (sadly) but there is a great concept and imagery with this piece. The ends flows well, and the whole thing sounds effortlessly done. Good job!!! :D

(also, I'd like to thank you for the fave! I'll be sure to have a good long read of your work when I have time XD)
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~DevilsMatrix Jan 17, 2013  Student Writer
naww thankyou so very very much! I'll make
a note to check out your gallery as well!
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~8flames8claws Jan 18, 2013  Student General Artist
:dance: no problem, and thank you!
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*TehAngelsCry Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
'Bitter sweat', I almost read as 'bitter sweet' x) which I guess is somewhat intended? Lovely piece! Love the rhythm at the end.
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~DevilsMatrix Jan 8, 2013  Student Writer
somwhat ;) Just playing with words. And thankyou so much! I'm not very good with rhythm, so I'm glad this worked abit
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~TheShanar Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very nice, the imagery matches throughout the poem. Some of the rhymes seem a little choppy, but maybe that's just me. Altogether, great work!
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~DevilsMatrix Jan 3, 2013  Student Writer
aw thankyou so much. Yes, I changed rhyming schemes a
few times in this, and even swapped between free verse
and traditional fixed... =( guilty
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Mood: Adoration *MEGAN-Yrrbby Jan 3, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
" Until such time as woe prevails,
I’ll only dream of you, my queen.
And when it comes, my love, she wails,
in you, sweet death, I shall be seen. "

My favorite verse from the entire poem. I absolutely adore it. Your writing has so much power and raw emotion to it, not only that, but it flows superbly and I absolutely love reading poems(or) writings where it flows freely and easily. Great work, loved it so much I have given you a favorite. xo
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~DevilsMatrix Jan 3, 2013  Student Writer
aw thankyou so very much!! The last two
stanzas are by far my favourite for that
exact reason. I find flow is something
that makes a poem reach its full potential,
thankyou so much for your kind comments! <3
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*MEGAN-Yrrbby Jan 3, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
It was my pleasure. <3
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